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Friday 25 August 2017

tirp to stardom

Recount Writing with Paragraphs -
Our Stardome Trip

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We will talk about how we are going to craft this recount together.

Our Moon is Special

There are many moons in the solar system, but none are like Earth’s. Mars has two tiny moons, called Phobos and Deimos. Jupiter has 67 moons, and they’re all different shapes, colours, and sizes. Saturn has 62 moons, and dozens more tiny moonlets amongst its golden rings. But on Earth, we have just one and we simply call it the Moon.










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You need to write four paragraphs about your trip to the Stardome. They need to have a
topic sentence,
three details,
and a concluding sentence.

Remember! This is a recount - you need to describe what happened on your trip in order.

What did you do, see, and learn during each part of your trip?

To help you, there are some topic sentences to start off each paragraph.

Start writing here:

Yesterday, all the Year 3s and Year 4s got on a bus to go to the Stardome. When we got at the stardome we went in inside and saw same game. One of the games was legos that was in special in a rock ship. There was same thiny that you have to poul it down and they you wall see it come up.







At the Stardome, we learned some really cool things about our solar system. Our solar system have 8 plaint. The closest one is mercury.
It is very hot and has no water or air and doesn’t have a moon.
Its year is only 88 day  this is how long it take to revolve around the sun.


When we weren’t in the Stardome, we were having fun outside.
I went on the flying fox. When I got on I went so so farst that It was so so cool.



After all this, we headed back to Point England School.
We were tired when we got back off the bus. The only ones that were tired was me and sivanneh. We got off the bus and we went back to class






After you are finished and have proofread, have this checked by Mr Moran, Mrs Moala, or Mr H, and post this to your blog.

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